To develop my life
학생이 쓴 원문
I would like to develop my life to enjoy and get be satisfied. I knew how much important to do self compassion. We have to do it for our self-regard. When we have a strong mind and high self regard we can endure against the stress.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Thomas!
I could not agree more. If you regard yourself highly because you respect the fact that you are wise, compassionate, and worthy of respect, you can shield yourself from unnecessary and irrelevant distraction or harm. Thus, you have to make yourself full again to be ready to love and be successful generally.
Kindly study my grammar suggestions below. You used very good vocabulary as well as combinations of sentences very well. Excellent job!
See you soon.
-T. Donna~
>> I would like to develop my life and enjoy being satisfied.
I knew how much important to do self compassion.
>> Correct!
Or: I know how important it is to do self compassion.
Or: I know how important it is to do self compassion.
We have to do it for our self-regard.
>> Correct!
When we have a strong mind and high self regard we can endure against the stress.
>> Correct!
Or: When we have a strong mind and high self-regard we can endure stress.
Or: When we have a strong mind and high self-regard we can endure stress.
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