To hope to avoid a vice
학생이 쓴 원문
I would like to avoid the vice that acting out of drunkenness. I don\'t like doing something without my controlling. And It must be bad thing and make me embarrassed.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Thomas!
It must be the spirit of alcohol that is taking control over you when you get drunk. Well, drinking is like a game- if you do unexpected things, the next day, you will be the topic of your friends\' story. Hence, behaving when you are intoxicated is a game of control. I hope that you will be safe each time you drink and do not do something unusual. ^^
Your written English level displays mastery of grammar and an evidence of long use of the language. If you read your composition again before sending it, you will realize that there may be something strange about the grammar structure and you may probably right. Then, you can edit it and make your composition error-free. Nonetheless, your sentences are organized and can easily be grasped.
I will see you tomorrow.
-T. Donna~
>> I would like to avoid the vice of acting out of drunkenness.
I don\'t like doing something without my controlling.
>> I don\'t like doing something without my control.
And It must be bad thing and make me embarrassed.
>> And, it must be a bad thing that makes me embarrassed.
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