To : Kelly(great teacher)
학생이 쓴 원문
please ask me the following questions on Wednesday.
1. Tell me about a work situation you had that required excellent communication skills.
2.Are you active in the community?
3.What was your biggest challenge in college?
4.What is a challenge that you recently encountered, and how did you deal with it?
5.What did you learn from college?
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When I was third year in my college, I had to design UML(Unified Modeling Language) for my major.
I was involved in one team, and I was in charge of designing class diagram because I had good knowledge of class concepts than other members.
We decided to make UML about cafe automated order system. After I finalized my tasks, I didn’t stop my work.
I tried to create prototype based on my class diagram.
When we presented our project to our classmates and professor, They were amazed at our project.
Because nobody tried to create prototype except our team.
And we had lunch with my professor, because he was impressed by our project.
강사 첨삭
Wow! You must be a genius! I\'m sure your professor back then was so proud to have students like you in his/her class just as I am proud to have you as my student. I\'ll prepare for the questions you\'ve listed here as well. Take care!
T. Kelly
please ask me the following questions on Wednesday.
>>Please ask me the following questions on Wednesday. (Capitalize the first word of a sentence.)1. Tell me about a work situation you had that required excellent communication skills.
>>Correct!2.Are you active in the community?
>>Correct!3.What was your biggest challenge in college?
>>Correct!4.What is a challenge that you recently encountered, and how did you deal with it?
>>Correct!5.What did you learn from college?
>>Correct!-------When I was third year in my college, I had to design UML(Unified Modeling Language) for my major.
>>When I was in third year college, I had to design UML (Unified Modeling Language) for my major.I was involved in one team, and I was in charge of designing class diagram because I had good knowledge of class concepts than other members.
>>I was involved in one team and I was in charge of designing the class diagram because I had better knowledge of class concepts than the other members.We decided to make UML about cafe automated order system.
>>Correct!
After I finalized my tasks, I didn’t stop my work.
>>Correct!I tried to create prototype based on my class diagram.
>>I tried to crea a prototype based on my class diagram.When we presented our project to our classmates and professor, They were amazed at our project.
>>When we presented our project to our classmates and professor, they were amazed at our project. (do not capitalize the word \"they\")Because nobody tried to create prototype except our team.
>>Because no other group tried to crea a prototype except our team.And we had lunch with my professor, because he was impressed by our project. >>Correct!
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