To Lynn, homework from 23rd Oct.

2018-10-29 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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Question: Does fashion allow people to express their individuality or does it force people to conform? Answer: I think things differ depending on the power of fashion in the society. I think fashion forces people to conform in the Korea. There are some trends in any generation. For example, many teens and 20s were dying to buy very long jumpers last winter, it was a symbol of the winter Olympic game held in Pyeongchang. And many men and women in mid-40 or 50 prefer to wear mountain clothes. And I'm not sure you've seen it, lots of old women in over 70 always have the same hair style which is very curly, also known as the Afro. You can even guess their age with their hairstyle or fashion.

강사 첨삭

Hey [이름]!(\",)

Oh, I\'ve seen it in Korean variety shows, old women specially those living in the countryside have the same hairstyle and clothing. Thank you for making time to make your homework.(\",)

~T. Lynn

I think things differ depending on the power of fashion in the society.

>> correct!

I think fashion forces people to conform in the Korea.

>> I think fashion forces people to conform in Korea.

There are some trends in any generation.

>> correct!

For example, many teens and 20s were dying to buy very long jumpers last winter, it was a symbol of the winter Olympic game held in Pyeongchang.

>> For example, many teens and those in their 20s were dying to buy very long jumpers last winter, it was a symbol of the winter Olympic game held in Pyeongchang.

 And many men and women in mid-40 or 50 prefer to wear mountain clothes.

>> And many men and women in mid-40s or 50s prefer to wear mountain/hiking climbing clothes.

And I\'m not sure you\'ve seen it, lots of old women in over 70 always have the same hair style which is very curly, also known as the Afro.

>> And I\'m not sure if you\'ve seen it, lots of old women in their70s always have the same hair style which is very curly, also known as the Afro.

 You can even guess their age with their hairstyle or fashion.

>> correct!

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