To send confidential information
학생이 쓴 원문
I think that the e-mail sending is a little dangerous for the confidential
information. That reasons are easy to escape them to someone and
unable to secure the confidential report. So, the most of people use
the personal fax and Social Network Services in daily life conveniently .
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]!
I also think that you are absolutely right about confidentiality of messages in the e-mail. At times, there are sensitive information such as bank passwords and others. So, we have to take precautions well.
The underlined words or phrases are my suggestions and their explanations are in black text. Please go over them below.
Thank you for your homework and a job well done!
See you tomorrow.
-T. Donna =)
information.
>> I think that sending e-mail is a little dangerous for confidential
information. EXPLANATION: 1.) The pattern of most sentences in English follows the Subject+ Verb+ Object. So \" I think that sending e-mail...\" is the better way to put it.
2.) Some nouns do not need \"the\" before them depending on their use in a sentence.
That reasons are easy to escape them to someone and
unable to secure the confidential report.
unable to secure the confidential report.
>> Those reasons are easy to escape from someone and
unable to secure the confidential report. EXPLANATION: 1.) \"That\" is singular and \"those\" is plural. Since you used \"reasons\", you have to use plural.
2.) If there is a source, then it is better to use \"from\" specially when we use the verb \"escape\", like, \" The criminal escaped from the prison cell.\"
So, the most of people use
the personal fax and Social Network Services in daily life conveniently .
the personal fax and Social Network Services in daily life conveniently .
>> So, most of the people use
the personal fax and Social Network Services in daily life conveniently .EXPLANATION: 1.) Just remove \"the\" between \"So, most\" because it should be before people.
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