To Shanee, Today's homework

2018-10-18 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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"As a result of tourism, many historical buildings and sites are being damaged beyond repair. What could be done to prevent this?" My answer> Capping the number of visitors would be a solution. And closing the place for a few months could be good for restoring. Take an example. I've been in Vatican last year with my family. The instructor guided us to a small room in the cathedral. It was 'Cappella Sistina', the Sistina Chapel, very well known for the Sistina Chapel Ceiling. By the way, the room was strictly controlled by some safety guards in Vatican. They warned people not to speak loudly. The place was supposed to be silent. Maybe any sound or people's breath could damage the painting. They also counted the number of people in the room. They permitted next tourists to enter only after visitors finished their appreciation and left the room. It could appear little arrogant, but I think it is a proper way to protect its treasure which has been over a half century.

강사 첨삭

How are you Sunnie?

It\'s a beautiful day here, I hope it\'s the same there.

Anyway, thank you so much for doing your homework.

I appreciate you sharing your opinions. Continue practicing your writing, okay?

See you tomorrow!

~Teacher Shanee^^,


\"As a result of tourism, many historical buildings and sites are being damaged beyond repair. What could be done to prevent this?\"
My answer>
Capping the number of visitors would be a solution.

>>> Correct!

And closing the place for a few months could be good for restoring. 

>>> Correct!
Take an example.

I\'ve been in Vatican last year with my family.

>>> Correct!

The instructor guided us to a small room in the cathedral.

>>> Correct!

It was \'Cappella Sistina\', the Sistina Chapel, very well known for the Sistina Chapel Ceiling. 

>>> Correct!
 By the way, the room was strictly controlled by some safety guards in Vatican.

>>> Correct!

They warned people not to speak loudly.

>>> Correct!

The place was supposed to be silent.

>>> Correct!

Maybe any sound or people\'s breath could damage the painting.

>>> Correct!

They also counted the number of people in the room.

>>> Correct!

They permitted next tourists to enter only after visitors finished their appreciation and left the room.

>>> They permitted other tourists to enter only after the ones inside were already done looking around and left the room.

It could appear little arrogant, but I think it is a proper way to protect its treasure which has been over a half century.

>>> It could be a little strict, but I think it is an effective way to protect its treasure which has been over a half millennium years old.

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