to. teacher camille

2017-01-04 · 첨삭 강사 camille

학생이 쓴 원문

Hello, teacher camille Nice to meet you:) My name is [이름] and i am 16 years old now. I have one younger brother and parents. My brother don't listen to me and he is very mischievous boy I like to play piano i started piano when i was 7years old Today it's my birthday. I am really happy about it After our class i am going to play bowling with my family Also i am going to eat delicious food for dinner But i don't know what to eat! can you recommend for me? Any way do you have favorite idol or k-pop boy band? My favorite idol is BTS i don't know that you know BTS But you have to know about them they are really handsome and cute I am really excite to meeting you about 10minute later, we will have a class now i have to go now bye~!:)

강사 첨삭

 Hi there my dear [이름]!

Thank you so much for doing a great great job in our class!

You impressed me a lot!
And baby happy birthday! I am so sorry that I haven\'t read your composition today. I wasn\'t able to greet you on your special day...

Thank you so much and have a great day baby!

Enjoy your special day!

xoxo Teacher Cam^^


Hello, teacher camille

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 Nice to meet you:)

>>correct
 My name is [이름] and i am 16 years old now.

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 I have one younger brother and parents.

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 My brother don\'t listen to me and he is very mischievous boy

>>My brother doesn\'t listen to me and he is very mischievous.
 I like to play piano i started piano when i was 7years old

>>I like to play the piano and I started playing the piano when I was 7 years old.
 Today it\'s my birthday.

>>Today is my birthday.
 I am really happy about it

>>correct
 After our class i am going to play bowling with my family 

>>correct
 Also i am going to eat delicious food for dinner

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 But i don\'t know what to eat! can you recommend for me?

>>But I don\'t know what to eat? Can you recommend me some?

 Any way do you have favorite idol or k-pop boy band?

>>correct
 My favorite idol is BTS i don\'t know that you know BTS

>>correct
 But you have to know about them

>>correct
 they are really handsome and cute

>>correct
 I am really excite to meeting you

>>correct
 about 10minute later, we will have a class

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 now i have to go now bye~!:)

>>correct

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