To what extent do you think that the educational system tries to push (or unconsciously pushes) peop
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The educational system still tries to push people into \'female\' and \'male\' roles.
For example, many textbooks used in school still depict that mothers are just housewives, and fathers are office workers.
We must get rid of this kind of stereotype when we are young.
We should sometimes depict our mothers as workers and depict our fathers as housewives.
Therefore, we have to make a lot of systems to change this stereotype.
First, our society should encourage men to use paternity leave.
The reason why the gender wage gap occurs is that there is a high possibility for women to quit their job after having a baby.
If our society supports paternity leave, we will be able to depict mothers as office workers in textbooks.
Second, a high percentage of women politicians is needed. One of the reasons that Iceland topped the ranking at a gender equality level is because they have many women politicians in their government. Women politicians can make a lot of supporting systems for women.
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The educational system still tries to push people into \'female\' and \'male\' roles.
>> CORRECT =)
For example, many textbooks used in school still depict that mothers are just housewives, and fathers are office workers.
>> CORRECT =)
We must get rid of this kind of stereotype when we are young.
>> CORRECT =)
OR >> We must get rid of this kind of stereotype at a very young age.
We should sometimes depict our mothers as workers and depict our fathers as housewives.
>> We should sometimes depict our mothers as workers and depict our fathers as househusbands/ housekeepers.
Therefore, we have to make a lot of systems to change this stereotype.
>> CORRECT =)
First, our society should encourage men to use paternity leave.
>> CORRECT =)
The reason why the gender wage gap occurs is that there is a high possibility for women to quit their job after having a baby.
>> CORRECT =)
If our society supports paternity leave, we will be able to depict mothers as office workers in textbooks.
>> CORRECT =)
Second, a high percentage of women politicians is needed.
>> CORRECT =)
One of the reasons that Iceland topped the ranking at a gender equality level is because they have many women politicians in their government.
>> CORRECT =)
Women politicians can make a lot of supporting systems for women.
>> CORRECT =)
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