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2010-06-21 · 첨삭 강사 Shy

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I read your job posting for overseas sales person on SARAM-IN’s website I have been impressed by all the reading and research I have don done about your company. So I am interested in applying for a overseas sales position with xxxxxx . My qualifications include a bachelor’s degree, some certificate and over one years of experience studying English in the Philippines. I consider myself to be ambitious and generous because I have a dream that is to be a international sales person. When I was young, I always dream to run as business man in the world. My college classes and social experience taught me to be a hard worker and good business man.

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Hello [이름],I guess this is an application letter.Good job on this I only notice few mistakes and they were very little.Actually it is unnoticeable but then I corrected it if ever you may wish to add more information on your skills for better impression.Hope you will get your dream job soon.I know you can do it.   LINA   I read your job posting for overseas sales person on SARAM-IN’s website I have been impressed by all the reading and research I have don done about your company. >> Correct!! So I am interested in applying for a overseas sales position with xxxxxx . >> So I am interested in applying for an overseas sales position with xxxxxx . My qualifications include a bachelor’s degree, some certificate and over one years of experience studying English in the Philippines. >> My qualifications include a bachelor’s degree, some certificate and over one year of experience studying English in the Philippines.I consider myself to be ambitious and generous because I have a dream that is to be a international sales person. When I was young, >> I consider myself to be ambitious and generous because I have a dream that is to be an international sales person. When I was young, I always dream to run as business man in the world. >> When I was young, I always dream to run a business >> When I was young, I always dream to be a business man in the world. My college classes and social experience taught me to be a hard worker and good business man. >> Correct!!  

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