Today diary
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February 11. 2011
Today, it was sunny and clear but pretty cold.
I met 'Kim' who is my older alumny of university. He works in cityhall as a civil servant now. We had decided to meet in 'Gwangwhamun' which is the main street of seoul. I arrived at there on time but he was a little late because his work was very busy. When he came, he wore a good suit and I thought it was great.
We went to italian restaurant for lunch. I ate something delicious like salads, spaghetti and pizzas with him. While eating, we talked about our alumnys and he gave me some advice about my career and future. It was very useful and valuable time. I thought that sometime I will give a lot of help to my younger alumny like 'Kim'.
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Hi [이름]! Thank you for the composition!Faye!
February 11. 2011>>Februray 11,2011Today, it was sunny and clear but pretty cold.
>>Today was sunny, clear but a bit cold.I met 'Kim' who is my older alumny of university.
>>I met ‘Kim’ he is an older alumnus in my university.
He works in cityhall as a civil servant now.
>>He is currently working in city hall as a civil servant.
We had decided to meet in 'Gwangwhamun' which is the main street of seoul.
>>We have decided to meet in ‘Gwangwhamun’ which is the main street of Seoul.
I arrived at there on time but he was a little late because his work was very busy.
>>I arrived there on time but he was a little late because he was busy with work.
When he came, he wore a good suit and I thought it was great. >>When he arrived he was wearing a good suit which I thought was great.We went to italian restaurant for lunch.
>>We went to an Italian restaurant for lunch.
I ate something delicious like salads, spaghetti and pizzas with him.
>>I ate something delicious like salad, spaghetti and pizza with him.
While eating, we talked about our alumnys and he gave me some advice about my career and future.
>>While eating we talked about our alumni and he gave me some advice regarding my career and future.
It was very useful and valuable time.
>>It was a very useful and valuable time.
I thought that sometime I will give a lot of help to my younger alumny like 'Kim'.
>>I thought that one of these days I will give a lot of help to my hunger alumnus just like what ‘Kim’ did.
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