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2018-05-21 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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I don't have class today so i got up very late and then i searched about international activity to support k-water company because if i do international activity,these experience will help to find job and learn manythings about team work but i should scout team member so i called some friends to join them this team work and i told about merit about this activity but just one friend want to join this team work other friends said thet need to consider this propose.i can understand their thought if we do this activity we will be busy and we have a lot to do for in our life i hope they will join this activity this activity need to 4team members so i have make 4 team members if i make team members we have to make short video about water conservation eventhought i don't have idea about that later i will make a good idea and we will be strong team and we will do many good experience i believe

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!~~


Thank you for sending your homework. I certainly appreciate it.


Cheers!

Jean^^



I don\'t have class today so i got up very late
and then i searched about international activity to support k-water company because if i do international activity,these experience will help to find job and learn manythings about team work
but i should scout team member so i called some friends to join them this team work and i told about merit about this activity but just one friend want to join this team work other friends said thet need to consider this propose.

>> I don\'t have a class today so I got up very late, then I searched on the internet about international activities that support K-water companies. If I engage in international activities, the experiences will help me find a good job as well as learn many things such as team work. However, since I need to work with a team, I called some of my friends to form a group.  I tried to convince my friends about the merits in joining such activities but I managed to persuade only one of them as the rest still had to think about my suggestion.


 i can understand their thought if we do this activity we will be busy and we have a lot to do for in our life i hope they will join this activity this activity need to 4team members so i have make 4 team members if i make team members we have to make short video about water conservation eventhought i don\'t have idea about that
later i will make a good idea and we will be strong team and we will do many good experience i believe


>> I understand their reservations because if we engage in this kind of activity, we would become busier since we still have to focus on other things such as our studies. Nevertheless, I certainly hope that they would agree to join me as I need them to form a 4-member team. Once we have the required team, we need to make a short video about water conservation. I must admit that  as of now, I don\'t have a plan for the video but I\'m going to think of one. I believe that our team is going to be a strong one and that we will experience many things together.



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