Today , it.s too hard.!!

2025-02-04 · 첨삭 강사 Jane

학생이 쓴 원문

Today was snowing a lot. Yesterday, My daughter\'s boots are torn. So, after they drop in school, I went to shoes store. I bought daughter\'s boots. And it brought to her. However, I had a accident. ㅠㅠ My car slipped a road. And dump it another car. But it\'s small accident. becouse this car was parking and noting in the car. I was so suprised. ㅠㅠ And get stressed.

강사 첨삭

Hey there, [이름] [이름]. I\'m sorry to hear about your day. I hope the situation was resolved easily. Your sentence structure is improving, and you are beginning to use more complex sentences. Keep up the good work. Stay safe and I hope the road situation gets better. See you in class. ~Teacher Jane c\",) 


Today was snowing a lot. 
>> CORRECT 

Yesterday, My daughter\'s boots are torn.
>> Yesterday, my daughter\'s boots were torn.

So, after they drop in school, I went to shoes store. 
>> So after I dropped them off at school I went to the shoe store. 

I bought daughter\'s boots. And it brought to her.
>> I bought my daughter\'s boots and I brought them to her. 

However, I had a accident. ㅠㅠ
>> However, I had an accident. 

My car slipped a road. And dump it another car.
>> My car slipped on the road and I bumped into another car. 

But it\'s small accident. becouse this car was parking and noting in the car.
>> It was a small accident because he was parking his car. 

I was so suprised. ㅠㅠ And get stressed.
>> I was so surprised and stressed. 

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