today's article
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1)it is important to rethinking why do I have a legal resident of this nation first?
For happiness or for money? What is the main objectives?
Simply If the objectives is just to be in legal resident, I can marry regardless of their nationality.
2)Many foreigners are in here.
I don’t care if foreigners live in here or not.
Nation need foreigners to work in hard position that korean don't want to, so by political the Korean government imported foreigners intentionally also the foreigners go abroad for earning much money for their family and nation.
강사 첨삭
[이름],
It's a pleasure to have your diary for the first time. You have done well and write as often as you could. It is one great way of polishing your grammar and vocabulary skills.
--jade--
1)it is important to rethinking why do I have a legal resident of this nation first?
>>It is important to reconsider why I needed a citizenship at a specific country first.
to be in legal resident, I can marry regardless of their nationality.>>In order to acquire a citizenship, I can marry anybody, regardless of their nationality. 2)Many foreigners are in here.
>>correct I don’t care if foreigners live in here or not.
>>I don't really care if there were many foreigners living in here. Nation need foreigners to work in hard position that korean don't want to, so by political the Korean government imported foreigners intentionally also the foreigners go abroad for earning much money for their family and nation.
>>The country needs workers for 3D jobs which Koreans do not want to do. The Korean government is actually importing hardworking foreigners who want to earn money for their families.
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