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2012-07-03 · 첨삭 강사 Alice

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I usually try to read books. Especially when I’m depressed or hard, I read more books to find answers. In my twenties I was interested with relief activities like this UN, Unicef, Wordvision and so on. So I red books related with that and I found sentences written below. “The person who never love someone can’t help anyone. The Person who can’t love even one person can’t love all over the world.” Actually I couldn’t love someone until then. After red this, I realized that I need to love someone and all kinds of love are priceless and valuable. So I met my first boyfriend and I started to donate some money for African kids.

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Hello there! Thank you for sharing this wonderful composition with me. You inspire me. You really have a big heart especially for the needy. Just continue with what you\'re doing. Anyway, have a wonderful day. _T. Alice_ I usually try to read books. >> Correct. Especially when I’m depressed or hard, I read more books to find answers. >>Especially when I\'m depressed, I read more books to look for answers to my queries. In my twenties I was interested with relief activities like this UN, Unicef, Wordvision and so on. >> In my twenties, I was interested with outreach programs of UN, Unicef, Wordvision and so on. So I red books related with that and I found sentences written below. >>So I read books related with that. Some information that I read are as follows: “The person who never love someone can’t help anyone. >> Correct.  >>A person who never loves someone can\'t help other people.  The Person who can’t love even one person can’t love all over the world.” >>The person who can\'t love even one person can\'t love anyone in the world. Actually I couldn’t love someone until then. >> Correct.  After red this, I realized that I need to love someone and all kinds of love are priceless and valuable. >>After reading this, I realized that I need to love someone. I also learned that all kinds of love are priceless and valuable. So I met my first boyfriend and I started to donate some money for African kids. >> Correct.  >>When I met my first boyfriend, I started to donate some money for African kids.

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