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I usually try to read books. Especially when I’m depressed or hard, I read more books to find answers. In my twenties I was interested with relief activities like this UN, Unicef, Wordvision and so on. So I red books related with that and I found sentences written below.
“The person who never love someone can’t help anyone. The Person who can’t love even one person can’t love all over the world.”
Actually I couldn’t love someone until then. After red this, I realized that I need to love someone and all kinds of love are priceless and valuable. So I met my first boyfriend and I started to donate some money for African kids.
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I usually try to read books.
>> Correct.
Especially when I’m depressed or hard, I read more books to find answers.
>>Especially when I\'m depressed, I read more books to look for answers to my queries.
In my twenties I was interested with relief activities like this UN, Unicef, Wordvision and so on.
>> In my twenties, I was interested with outreach programs of UN, Unicef, Wordvision and so on.
So I red books related with that and I found sentences written below. >>So I read books related with that. Some information that I read are as follows:
“The person who never love someone can’t help anyone.
>> Correct.
>>A person who never loves someone can\'t help other people.
The Person who can’t love even one person can’t love all over the world.”
>>The person who can\'t love even one person can\'t love anyone in the world.
Actually I couldn’t love someone until then.
>> Correct.
After red this, I realized that I need to love someone and all kinds of love are priceless and valuable.
>>After reading this, I realized that I need to love someone. I also learned that all kinds of love are priceless and valuable.
So I met my first boyfriend and I started to donate some money for African kids.
>> Correct.
>>When I met my first boyfriend, I started to donate some money for African kids.
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