Today's essay~~^^

Like this question my answer is absolutely not. Now i'm satisified with my life and myself. Also I never want to be a famous person before. Because sometimes the life of famous peaple are not so good. Everytime the public watches of their action, speaking even the personal life. Yes, maybe they have a lot of money but they don't have freedom from the public. If I'm a famous person, my life tendency will be shorted from the stress. I choose the freedom than the famous, it's better. I love my life and the most important thing for the happy life is that love myself and appreciate about what i've got already. Just thanks for everything that accompany with my life~~~^^

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Like this question my answer is absolutely not.

>> With regards this question, my answer is absolutely NO.

Now i\'m satisified with my life and myself.

>> I\'m satisfied with my life and myself now.

Also I never want to be a famous person before.

>> I also never wanted to be a famous person before.

Because sometimes the life of famous peaple are not so good.

>>It is because the life of a famous person is not good.

Everytime the public watches of their action, speaking even the personal life.

>> People are always watching their actions.

Yes, maybe they have a lot of money but they don\'t have freedom from the public.

>> Correct

If I\'m a famous person, my life tendency will be shorted from the stress.

>> If I\'m famous, my life will be shortened because of stress.

I choose the freedom than the famous, it\'s better.

>> I choose to be common than to become famous.

I love my life and the most important thing for the happy life is that love myself and appreciate about what i\'ve got already.

>> I love my life and  and the most important thing in life is to be happy , love thy self and appreciate what you already have.

Just thanks for everything that accompany with my life~~~^^

>> Just be thankful about everything that you have in life~~~^^