Today\'s homework

2023-07-16 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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Homework ESSAY (Please write a short essay to answer the question.) > Which do you think is more important, mental health or physical health? I think physical health is more important. There is such a saying \"건강한 신체에 건강한 정신이 깃든다.\". The saying means that healthy body has healthy spirit. Of course, i don\'t think that i ignore mental health. But, if not my body is good, my mind is not good also. i think mental is result and body is method. Wrong way cause wrong result.

강사 첨삭

Thank you for this Lee!

I think physical health is more important.

>>> correct
There is such a saying \"건강한 신체에 건강한 정신이 깃든다.\".

>>> correct

>>> OR: There is such a saying that goes like this, \"건강한 신체에 건강한 정신이 깃든다.\".
The saying means that healthy body has healthy spirit.

>>> OR: The saying means that a healthy body leads to a healthy spirit.

>>> OR: The saying means \"healthy body, healthy mind.\"

Of course, i don\'t think that i ignore mental health.

>>> Of course, I don\'t think that I should ignore mental health.

>>> OR: Of course, that does not mean that I should ignore a healthy mind.

But, if not my body is good, my mind is not good also.

>>> But, if my body is not good, my mind is not good as well.

i think mental is result and body is method.

>>> I think mental is the result and body is the method.
Wrong way cause wrong result.

>>> a wrong way causes a wrong result.

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