Today\'s homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Homework
ESSAY (Please write a short essay to answer the question.)
> Do you have a dream job? Why is that your dream job?
My dream job is game programmer.
Making game makes me happy.
I want to increase people who buy and play my game.
Also, i wanna develope Virtual game that it is alike real life but, player can everything.
They can feel all sences even pain and thirst.
I must make this game in my future.
강사 첨삭
Thank you so much for this Lee. This game sounds interesting. It will be revolutionary, but also sounds a bit scary because it feels like almost reality.
My dream job is game programmer.
>>> My dream job is to be a game programmer.
Making games makes me happy.
>>> correct
I want to increase people who buy and play my games.
>>> correct
Also, i wanna develope Virtual game that it is alike real life but, player can everything.
>>> Also, I wanna develop a Virtual game that it is similar to real life but players can do almost everything.
They can feel all sences even pain and thirst.
>>> They can feel all senses even pain and thirst.
I must make this game in my future.
>>> My dream job is to be a game programmer.
Making games makes me happy.
>>> correct
I want to increase people who buy and play my games.
>>> correct
Also, i wanna develope Virtual game that it is alike real life but, player can everything.
>>> Also, I wanna develop a Virtual game that it is similar to real life but players can do almost everything.
They can feel all sences even pain and thirst.
>>> They can feel all senses even pain and thirst.
I must make this game in my future.
>>> correct
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