Today\'s homework
학생이 쓴 원문
HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
ESSAY: Some people think employers should not care about the way their employees dress, but the quality of work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
I think that employees not care about dress code. They only be care for their environment and feeling in factory.
But I don\'t argue that they have to ignore clothes. It needs fit clothes. these are good equipment to protect dangerous.
Howerver hardly atomosphere makes our works difficult.
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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think that employees not care about dress code.
>>> I think employees don\'t care about their dress code.
They only be care for their environment and feeling in factory.
>>> They only care for their environment and feelings in the factory.
OR>>> They only mind about their work environment and emotions.
But I don\'t argue that they have to ignore clothes.
But I don\'t argue that they have to ignore clothes.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
OR>>> I am not against dress code.
It needs fit clothes. these are good equipment to protect dangerous.
>>> They need comfortable clothes. These are good equipment to protect themselves from danger.
Howerver hardly atomosphere makes our works difficult.
Howerver hardly atomosphere makes our works difficult.
>>> Moreover, tough atmosphere makes the work more difficult.
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