Today\'s homework

2023-08-17 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

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ESSAY: Recent advances in medicine have resulted in an increase in life expectancy over the past four years. Do you think that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? Exactly yes. advances of medicine have taken many good things. For example medical revolution is able to postpone deadline and they enjoy their life. Human\'s immune system is more healthier than before years too. Of course there are disadvantages such as increasing drugs, abusing, murder and addiction. In addition choosing death by medicine is become a big problem in recently society. But i think that these are bigger advantages than disadvantages.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Lee~!^^ Thanks again for doing your homework. I see that you are quite improving in class. Enjoy learning the language.

>>> TEACHER GEMMA

Exactly yes. advances of medicine have taken many good things.

>>> CORRECT~!^^
For example medical revolution is able to postpone deadline and they enjoy their life.

>>> CORRECT~!^^
Human\'s immune system is more healthier than before years too.

>>> Human\'s immune system is healthier compared in the past too.
Of course there are disadvantages such as increasing drugs, abusing, murder and addiction.

>>> CORRECT~!^^
In addition choosing death by medicine is become a big problem in recently society.

>>> In addition choosing death by medicine is becoming a big problem in society recently.

OR >>> In addition, suicide rate by taking medicine is becoming a big problem in society recently.

But i think that these are bigger advantages than disadvantages.

>>> But I think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

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