Today\'s homework
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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
ESSAY: Fast food is a part of life in many places. Some people think this has bad effects on lifestyle and diets. Do you agree or disagree?
Fast food is bad for our body. But it must not be bad for our life.
For example hamburger is good food for diet. it includes healthy food such as lettuce, tomato, and beef.
These things make nutritional balance. The french fry just makes our body bad.
The other example is pizza. Pizza is a Italy traditional food. and these aren\'t a result that Italy people are sick for pizza.
Frankly, American pizza that need more bad ingredient are gaining weight. are not Italy pizza.
In sort, some fast food make us bad clearly. But there is a good fast food for out life obviously.
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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Fast food is bad for our body.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
But it must not be bad for our life.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
For example hamburger is good food for diet.
For example hamburger is good food for diet.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
It includes healthy food such as lettuce, tomato, and beef.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
These things make nutritional balance.
These things make nutritional balance.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
OR>>> These comprise nutritional balance.
The french fry just makes our body bad.
>>> French fries makes the body unhealthy.
The other example is pizza.
The other example is pizza.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Pizza is a Italy traditional food.
>>> Pizza is Italy\'s traditional food.
and these aren\'t a result that Italy people are sick for pizza.
>>> These don\'t make Italians get sick.
>>> Eating pizza doesn\'t Italians get sick.
Frankly, American pizza that need more bad ingredient are gaining weight. are not Italy pizza.
Frankly, American pizza that need more bad ingredient are gaining weight. are not Italy pizza.
>>> To be honest, America\'s pizza has unhealthy ingredients not Italy\'s.
In sort, some fast food make us bad clearly.
In sort, some fast food make us bad clearly.
>>> In short, some fast food makes our body unhealthy.
But there is a good fast food for our life obviously.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
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