Today\'s homework
학생이 쓴 원문
ESSAY: Nowadays, more and more people from different cities are spending more time away from their families. What are the possible reasons and the effects on the people themselves and their families?
Nowadays, people don\'t gather as familly. They scatter each other because of their duty.
When they marriaged people and no child, he or she can move their jobs.
He puts his wife and then go to the other cities to keep his jobs.
if they have a baby, can go to the better place for child education.
There are many things that we live different place each other.
The bad things are that it makes bad feeling such as blue, sad, lonely, and anger.
And these make family bronken.
강사 첨삭
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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Nowadays, people don\'t gather as familly.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
They scatter each other because of their duty.
>>> They\'re scattered in different place because of their duty.
When they marriaged people and no child, he or she can move their jobs.
When they marriaged people and no child, he or she can move their jobs.
>>> Unmarried people can move anywhere for their job.
He puts his wife and then go to the other cities to keep his jobs.
He puts his wife and then go to the other cities to keep his jobs.
>>> Fathers leave their wives then go to the other cities to keep their jobs.
if they have a baby, can go to the better place for child education.
if they have a baby, can go to the better place for child education.
>>> If they have children, they can choose a better place for their children\'s education.
There are many things that we live different place each other.
There are many things that we live different place each other.
>>> There are many reasons why we live separately from each other.
The bad things are that it makes bad feeling such as blue, sad, lonely, and anger.
The bad things are that it makes bad feeling such as blue, sad, lonely, and anger.
>>> The disadvantage is that it makes us feel bad, feel blue, sad, lonely and angry.
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