Today\'s homework
학생이 쓴 원문
ESSAY: Although parents are responsible for raising a child, outside influence plays a key role in their development. To what extent do you agree or disagree
factor of outside impacts children\'s growing. But the most important thing i think is the attention of parents.
parent\'s expression gives mant impact they children. they must not release there feeling to children.
if they are swayed by emotions, children can\'t choose right action and he or she can\'t grow social relationship.
children\'s relationship affect their life. people who don\'t give education may become criminal.
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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
factor of outside impacts children\'s growing.
>>> Children\'s development is impacted by external factors.
But the most important thing i think is the attention of parents.
>>> However, the most important thing is the parents\' attention.
parent\'s expression gives mant impact they children.
parent\'s expression gives mant impact they children.
>>> The way parents act has a big impact on their children.
they must not release there feeling to children.
>>> They should not be so emotional in front of their children.
if they are swayed by emotions, children can\'t choose right action and he or she can\'t grow social relationship.
if they are swayed by emotions, children can\'t choose right action and he or she can\'t grow social relationship.
>>> Children cannot make moral decisions or develop healthy social relationships if they are influenced by their parents\' emotions.
children\'s relationship affect their life.
children\'s relationship affect their life.
>>> Children\'s social relationship can affect their lives.
people who don\'t give education may become criminal.
>>> Parents who don\'t educate their children well may turn to criminals someday.
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