today\'s homework
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ESSAY: In many situations, people who break the law should be warned instead of punished. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
I think people who break the law must be punished. Because punishments change people better.
I believe that people are not kind from first. People bear them thought law and punishments.
If they don\'t get punishment, they will be depreciate other people. The weak hurt and be snatched their precious things.
There are kind people in this world. someone sacrifice life my self to help other people. But the peple are not always kind.
They are educated good place and strict law.
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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think people who break the law must be punished.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Because punishments change people better.
>>> Because punishments can change the people for the better.
I believe that people are not kind from first.
I believe that people are not kind from first.
>>> I believe that people are not naturally.
People bear them thought law and punishments.
>>> People bear them through law and punishments.
If they don\'t get punishment, they will be depreciate other people.
If they don\'t get punishment, they will be depreciate other people.
>>> If they don\'t get punished, they will be depreciated by other people.
The weak hurt and be snatched their precious things.
>>> The weak could be hurt and could be victims of snatching.
There are kind people in this world.
There are kind people in this world.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
someone sacrifice life my self to help other people.
>>> Some people can sacrifice their lives to help other people.
But the peple are not always kind.
>>> However, not most people are kind.
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