today\'s homework
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ESSAY: As the number of cars increases, more money has to be spent on road systems. Some people think the government should pay for this. Others, however, think that drivers should cover the costs. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Some people say that road systems should be pay by goverment. They require better systems and increasing traffical industry. and believe these are helpful country\'s success. But another people scold them. they say that spending money for road are foolish thinking. Also, they agree with other argument that car industry helps our life. But it isn\'t reationship with car and road. They just think road are method to connect city and city. They think that it don\'t mean. So, they think that waste thier money.
I think that road systems are needed. these are quiet important. If we don\'t fix road, our industry will be freeze. The flow will not be correct. At result our country will go bankrup.
We always search better road system.
강사 첨삭
Hi there Lee! Wow! I was surprised with your essay. It\'s a bit longer this time. Keep it up.
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Some people say that road systems should be pay by goverment.
>>> Some people say that road systems should be paid by the government.
They require better systems and increase traffic industry.
>>> CORRECT
and believe these are helpful country\'s success.
>>> And they believe these could be helpful to the country\'s success.
But another people scold them. they say that spending money for road are foolish thinking.
>>> But another people scold them. They say that spending money for road are foolish ideas.
Also, they agree with other argument that car industry helps our life.
>>> CORRECT
But it isn\'t reationship with car and road.
>>> But it is not related to cars and roads.
They just think road are method to connect city and city.
>>> They just think that highways are just for connecting cities.
They think that it don\'t mean.
>>> They don\'t think it\'s meaningful.
So, they think that waste thier money.
>>> So, they think it\'s a waste of money.
I think that road systems are needed.
>>> CORRECT
OR>>> I think that road systems are necessary.
These are quiet important.
>>> CORRECT
If we don\'t fix road, our industry will be freeze.
>>> If we won\'t fix our roads, our industry will be frozen.
The flow will not be corrected.
>>> CORRECT
At result our country will go bankrupt.
>>> As a result, our country will go bankrupt.
We always search better road system.
We always search better road system.
>>> We always search for better road system.
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