Today\'s homework

2024-01-03 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: ESSAY: What was your worst experience of rejection and best experience of acceptance? My worst experience had been in middle school. When i was student, i like the woman who is activity, smart, bright and positive. She was many men\'s idol, i fell in love her too. Sometimes i wondered that she became my first girlfriend. In honestly, i know that she think me as good friend. not lover. But i am too young to acknowledge. i misunderstood. someday, it was very great day, a golden aftergrow mirror me and her. i asked her out. She was smile and said that \"I\'m sorry. i don\'t wanna make boy friend\". My short love was ended. i left her my heart. After that, she became a couple with my best friend. it so funny. That\'s my worst. My best thing had been in high school. I\'ve already failed the college exam and I\'ve retaken it for a year. But i studied very hard and i passed university that i wanna go. That\'s my best.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Lee~!^^ No one can go back in time to change what has happened, so work on your present to make yourself a wonderful future. The New Year has brought another chance for us to set things right and to open up a new chapter in our lives. Enjoy the New Year~!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
My worst experience had been in middle school.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
When i was student, i like the woman who is activity, smart, bright and positive.
>>> When I was student, I liked a woman who is active, smart, bright and positive.
She was many men\'s idol, i fell in love her too.
>>> She was many men\'s idol and I fell in love with her too.
 Sometimes i wondered that she became my first girlfriend.
>>>  Sometimes I wondered if she became my first girlfriend.
In honestly, i know that she think me as good friend. not lover.
>>> Honestly, I know she thought of me as a good friend and not a lover.
But i am too young to acknowledge. i misunderstood.
>>> But I was too young to accept it so I misunderstood.
someday, it was very great day, a golden after grow mirror me and her. i asked her out.
>>> One great day, after gotten older, I asked her out.
She was smile and said that \"I\'m sorry. i don\'t wanna make boy friend\".
>>> She smiled and said that she didn\'t want to have a boyfriend. 
My short love was ended.
>>> My short love story ended.
 I left her my heart.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
After that, she became a couple with my best friend.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 It so funny. That\'s my worst.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
My best thing had been in high school.
>>> My worst thing in high school. 
I\'ve already failed the college exam and I\'ve retaken it for a year. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
But I studied very hard and I passed university that I wanna go.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
That\'s my best.
>>> CORRECT~!^^

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