Today\'s homework
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ESSAY: Some people believe that money is the major source of happiness. Do you agree or disagree.
I think that money is useful tool making happiness. But we have not to mistake tool for need.
We use money for method of life. We try to live to use money rightly. But we don\'t live for money.
They become good partner if we use rightly. But bad owner if we use badly.
We never become slave of money.
강사 첨삭
Hi there Lee! I really appreciate your diligence in doing your homework. Try and keep your enthusiasm up! Not always easy, but he day you take complete responsibility for yourself, the day you stop making any excuses, that’s the day you start to the top! Do the best you can until you know better. Then when you know better, do better!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think that money is useful tool making happiness.
>>> I think money is the source of happiness.
But we have not to mistake tool for need.
>>> But we should not be mistaken to use money for our wants.
We use money for method of life.
We use money for method of life.
>>> We use money to live.
We try to live to use money rightly.
>>> We have to live as we use money wisely.
But we don\'t live for money.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
They become good partner if we use rightly.
They become good partner if we use rightly.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
>>> We\'ll become a good partner if we use it wisely.
But bad owner if we use badly.
>>> But if we misspend it.
We never become slave of money.
We never become slave of money.
>>> We should never become slaves of money.
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