Today\'s homework
학생이 쓴 원문
ESSAY: Some people think it’s a good idea to wear a uniform at school. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer with relevant examples from knowledge or experience.
I think uniform is good for us. Uniform makes us better feeling about sense of belonging and devote our group.
Some party that maybe mine, recommend to wear a uniform because of above reason.
Also, this clothes can become more effecient. Wearing uniform means seperate between work and break.
This seperation can be good method to upgrade efficiency.
if we can work and rest every right time, we will be happier than we can\'t.
Uniform be showed themselves social personality too. People are animal of society. The fact that we wear a same uniform makes them to respect and love each other.
강사 첨삭
Hi there Lee! Good morning to you! Where will you go? I saw your schedule is no longer on my page. I hope to see you again someday!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think uniform is good for us.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Uniform makes us better feeling about sense of belonging and devote our group.
>>> Wearing uniforms gives us a sense of belonging and devotion to out group.
Some party that maybe mine, recommend to wear a uniform because of above reason.
Some party that maybe mine, recommend to wear a uniform because of above reason.
>>> Some parties require uniforms because of the reasons mentioned above.
Also, this clothes can become more efficient.
Also, this clothes can become more efficient.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Wearing uniform means separate between work and break.
>>> Wearing uniform means separation between work and day off.
This separation can be a good method to upgrade efficiency.
This separation can be a good method to upgrade efficiency.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
If we can work and rest at the right time, we will be happier than we can\'t.
If we can work and rest at the right time, we will be happier than we can\'t.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Uniform be showed themselves social personality too.
Uniform be showed themselves social personality too.
>>> Uniform shows social personality too.
People are animals of society.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
The fact that we wear a same uniform makes them to respect and love each other.
>>> The fact that we wear the same uniform makes people to respect and love each other.
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