Today\'s homework

2024-01-31 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

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ESSAY: These days, older people who have retired often choose to spend money on themselves (for example on holidays) rather than save money for their children. Is this a positive or negative development? I think it is a positive development. It is very good behavior for parents to use money for their children, but I think it is wrong for them to use money for their children even when they are adults. Of course, if your child is a college student, that can be an exception. However, I think investing money despite having a job ruins your child\'s money thinking.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Lee! Thanks again for doing your homework! Keep it up~!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think it is a positive development.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
It is very good behavior for parents to use money for their children, but I think it is wrong for them to use money for their children even when they are adults.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Of course, if your child is a college student, that can be an exception. 
>>> Of course, if your child is a college student, it could be an exception. 
However, I think investing money despite having a job ruins your child\'s money thinking.
>>> However, I think investing money despite having a job ruins your child\'s perception of money. 

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