Today\'s homework
학생이 쓴 원문
ESSAY: Some people think it is a better way to leave their home country to improve their work and living opportunities, while others think staying in their own country is a better choice. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
I think that leaving home country is good for me. But can have a clear goal in mind.
If they don\'t have any mind which upgrade their skill, they will be failed at other country.
And it is important to choose countries too.
For examples, i want to increase our abilities, i can\'t go good countries that have good people, good air, and traffic.
This situation is very wrong selection.
강사 첨삭
Hi Lee!^^ It\'s good to check your essay again! Thank you because you always remember to do your homework. Keep it up! Enjoy your the new semester too!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think leaving my home country is good for me.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
But can have a clear goal in mind.
>>> But [ I should ] have a clear goal in mind.
If they don\'t have any mind which upgrade their skill, they will be failed at other country.
If they don\'t have any mind which upgrade their skill, they will be failed at other country.
>>> If they [ won\'t think of developing ] their skill, they will [ fail ] [ in another ] country.
And it is important to choose countries too.
And it is important to choose countries too.
>>> And it is important to [ consider which country to go to.]
For examples, i want to increase our abilities, i can\'t go good countries that have good people, good air, and traffic.
For examples, i want to increase our abilities, i can\'t go good countries that have good people, good air, and traffic.
>>> For examples, [ if I won\'t develop my abilities, ] I can\'t go to good countries that have good people, good air, and traffic.
This situation is very wrong selection.
This situation is very wrong selection.
>>> This situation requires a wise decision.
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