Today\'s homework
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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
Writing task: What scares you the most in this world?
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In honestly, I have lots of scary things in this world. Ghosts are scared, disasters such as typoon or earthquake are scared, and mad mom because of bad things are scared too. (well, it may be the scariest things in my life haha :))
But the best of horror is the people. Don\'t misunderstand. It is indifference that i wanna tell you. In past, people think each other. they was considerate each other. by the way, in nowadays they aren\'t.
we learn and be teached future people about the morality, etiquette and must-do thing for a person. Unfortunately, we don\'t do them. these make connection peple by people dirtly. And then a divided individual will eventually fail before long. What else is this the scariest thing?
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This
is a really thoughtful reflection. You explained your fear in a deep and honest
way, and the idea about indifference being scarier than ghosts is powerful.
You clearly have empathy and that already makes the world a little less scary.
-T. Sonny
In honestly, I have lots of scary things in this world.
>> Honestly, there are many things in this world that scare me.
Ghosts are scared, disasters such as typoon or earthquake are scared, and mad mom because of bad things are scared too.
>> Ghosts are scary, natural disasters such as typhoons and earthquakes are frightening, and even angry mothers in difficult situations can be scary too.
(well, it may be the scariest things in my life haha :))
>> (well, that might be the scariest thing in my life, haha 😊).
But the best of horror is the people.
>> However, the greatest horror is people.
Don\'t misunderstand.
>> Please don’t misunderstand me.
It is indifference that i wanna tell you.
>> I am referring to indifference.
In past, people think each other.
>> In the past, people cared about one another.
they was considerate each other.
>> They were considerate of each other.
by the way, in nowadays they aren\'t.
>> However, nowadays, this is no longer common.
we learn and be teached future people about the morality, etiquette and must-do thing for a person.
>> We learn and teach future generations about morality, etiquette, and the basic responsibilities of being a good person.
Unfortunately, we don\'t do them.
>> Unfortunately, we often fail to practice these values ourselves.
these make connection peple by people dirtly.
>> This taints the connections among people.
And then a divided individual will eventually fail before long.
>> And as a result, isolated individuals will eventually struggle or fail.
What else is this the scariest thing?
>> What could be scarier than that?
-T. Sonny
In honestly, I have lots of scary things in this world.
>> Honestly, there are many things in this world that scare me.
Ghosts are scared, disasters such as typoon or earthquake are scared, and mad mom because of bad things are scared too.
>> Ghosts are scary, natural disasters such as typhoons and earthquakes are frightening, and even angry mothers in difficult situations can be scary too.
(well, it may be the scariest things in my life haha :))
>> (well, that might be the scariest thing in my life, haha 😊).
But the best of horror is the people.
>> However, the greatest horror is people.
Don\'t misunderstand.
>> Please don’t misunderstand me.
It is indifference that i wanna tell you.
>> I am referring to indifference.
In past, people think each other.
>> In the past, people cared about one another.
they was considerate each other.
>> They were considerate of each other.
by the way, in nowadays they aren\'t.
>> However, nowadays, this is no longer common.
we learn and be teached future people about the morality, etiquette and must-do thing for a person.
>> We learn and teach future generations about morality, etiquette, and the basic responsibilities of being a good person.
Unfortunately, we don\'t do them.
>> Unfortunately, we often fail to practice these values ourselves.
these make connection peple by people dirtly.
>> This taints the connections among people.
And then a divided individual will eventually fail before long.
>> And as a result, isolated individuals will eventually struggle or fail.
What else is this the scariest thing?
>> What could be scarier than that?
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