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What is your hometown famous for? 2 weeks ago, I moved my house Suwon to Seoul which is capital Most famous in Suwon is Suwon castle. In Korea, there are lots of castles but Suwon castle is biggest than other castle. And this castle is a attack castle, not a defensive castle Lots of people walk on the wall of this castle as the Great Wall of China My hometown is Busan which is sencond largest in Korea. Moat important place in my hmetown is Haewoon Beach. Many people visit this beach to swim in the sea every year. Hundreds of thousands prople visit this beach per day in the summer. Sometimes about 1 million visit here. When I was young, I used to go this beach with my friens 4 or 5 times per year. I have not visited to Busan after I gratuated high school I plan to visit to Busan with my family next summer vocation. Thanks a lot

Good afternoon! Thank you for doing this. Kindly check the corrections that I made here. By the way, there\'s one sentence which you wrote that I\'m not  familiar with. is it alright if we can talkabout it during the class. Thank you and happy Valentines Day!!~ Teacher Kay What is your hometown famous for?2 weeks ago, I moved my house Suwon to Seoul which is capital>> Two weeks ago, I moved to a new house in Seoul, which is the capital of Korea. I used to live in Suwon. Most famous in Suwon is Suwon castle. >> The most famous landmark in Suwon is Suwon Castle. In Korea, there are lots of castles but Suwon castle is biggest than other castle. >> In Korea, there are lots of castles but Suwon castle is the biggest.And this castle is a attack castle, not a defensive castle ***I\'m sorry but what do you mean by attack castle? Can we talk more about it during the class. Thank you.Lots of people walk on the wall of this castle as the Great Wall of China>> Lots of people walk on the wall of this castle just like in the Great Wall of China.My hometown is Busan which is sencond largest in Korea. >> My hometown is Busan which is sencond largest city in Korea. Moat important place in my hmetown is Haewoon Beach. >> The most important/famous place in my hometwon is Haewoon Beach. Many people visit this beach to swim in the sea every year. >> Many people visit this beach to swim every year. Hundreds of thousands prople visit this beach per day in the summer. >> Hundreds of thousands people visit this beach everyday in the summer. Sometimes about 1 million visit here. >> Sometimes, almost one million people visit there.When I was young, I used to go this beach with my friens 4 or 5 times per year.>> When I was young, I used to go to this beach with my friens 4 or 5 times per year.I have not visited to Busan after I gratuated high school. >> I have not visited Busan after I gratuated high school.I plan to visit to Busan with my family next summer vocation.>> I have a plan to visit Busan with my family next summer vacation.Thanks a lot >> Correct.