Today's homework!!

2014-10-10 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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If I make a new holiday, I would like to make a special holiday celebrating special students who changed the major. Two years ago, I changed my major from social welfare. At that time, I wanted to be helped by friends because I wan not good at English(of course, I am still not..ㅠㅠ)and every situation made me uncomfortable. So, I know the feeling of being alone. Moreover, it is difficult to make friends to us because the rest of us already are friends. Therefore, I want to celebrate and meet special students every year. Because we already have in common, we can easily be friends each other. I want to share the good ideas of adapting a new environment and make a lot of friends through this holiday.

강사 첨삭

Hi there!   That\'s an interesting holiday [이름]! If only we can make holidays on our own, there are already a lot of unusual yet interesting ones. Anyway, try to make fnew riends in school. Perhaps there are a lot of other students who are taking up different majors in your university, right? You just need to have the courage to introduce yourself first.   Try to make new friends this weekend! See ya!   ~Teacher Shanee     If I make a new holiday, I would like to make a special holiday celebrating special students who changed the major.>>> If I could make a new holiday, I would like to make a special one for the students who changed their majors. Two years ago, I changed my major from social welfare. >>> Two years ago, I changed my major, Social Welfare.At that time, I wanted to be helped by friends because I wan not good at English(of course, I am still not..ㅠㅠ)and every situation made me uncomfortable. >>> At that time, I wanted to be helped by my friends because I was not good at English (Of course, the case is still the same.) and every situation that I had made me uncomfortable.So, I know the feeling of being alone. >>> Correct!Moreover, it is difficult to make friends to us because the rest of us already are friends. >>> Moreover, it difficult to meet new friends because most of us are already friends.Therefore, I want to celebrate and meet special students every year. >>> Correct!Because we already have in common, we can easily be friends each other. >>> Because if we have the same major and other things in common, we can easily become friends with each other.I want to share the good ideas of adapting a new environment and make a lot of friends through this holiday. >>> Correct!

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