Today's homework!!
학생이 쓴 원문
Success and happiness do not come to people as easily as we think.
They are not like sun which comes every morning.
So when someone hopes and tries to do something related to his field, success will come to him naturally.
In case of happiness, we try more and more.
Although we have a lot of money, power, and high status, there is someone who is not satisfied.
In contrast, although they do not have many factors such as power and money, there is someone who is satisfied.
I think there is no factor of happiness in the world any more.
But, there is a simple way to be happy.
It is that we appreciate small things.
For example, when we feel thirsty, what we can drink water is trivial, but we should appreciate the valuable opportunity.
강사 첨삭
Hi there [이름]!
Thanks for sharing your thoughts!
Some say that happiness is not just consequential to people\'s choice but also to factors beyond control.
However, making the right choice also plays an important role.
What we choose now can determine our future and happiness. Thus, choosing carefully is really important.
Take care!
~Teacher Shanee
Success and happiness do not come to people as easily as we think.
>>> Correct!They are not like sun which comes every morning.
>>> Correct! (the sun)So when someone hopes and tries to do something related to his field, success will come to him naturally.
>>> Correct!In case of happiness, we try more and more.
>>> Correct!
>>> OR: In case of achieving happiness, we keep on trying.Although we have a lot of money, power, and high status, there is someone who is not satisfied.
>>> Despite having a lot of money, power or high status, some people are still not satisfied.In contrast, although they do not have many factors such as power and money, there is someone who is satisfied.
>>> In contrast/On the other hand, despite not having money or power, some are still satisfied with their lives.I think there is no factor of happiness in the world any more.
>>> I think, there is no definite factor that can make a person happy.But, there is a simple way to be happy.
>>> Correct!It is that we appreciate small things.
>>> It is by appreciating small things.For example, when we feel thirsty, what we can drink water is trivial, but we should appreciate the valuable opportunity.
>>> For example, when we feel thristy and the only thing that we can drink is water, we should appreciate it.
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