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2014-12-12 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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Using social networking sites can invade our privacy. Someone who I do not know can get to know my name and phone number, address, family and the story of my life. As the popularity of social networking sites has increased, that is becoming a serious problem. Moreover, some pictures or videos is being shared rapidly through these sites without permission. It is an obvious violation of somebody's portrait rights. So, we have to think carefully about these situations.

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Hello there again!   There are different advantages and distadvantages of social networking sites. We can connect with our friends, loved ones and acquaintances all over the world with the use of these sites. We can alao share several information to other people. However nowadays, it is becoming unsafe to use social networking sites. We could be a victim of fraud or identity theft. So when we use these sites, we need to be very careful and do due diligence to avoid being a victim.   Take care!   ~Teacher Shanee   Using social networking sites can invade our privacy.>>> Correct! Someone who I do not know can get to know my name and phone number, address, family and the story of my life. >>> Someone I know can get any personal information about me like my name, phone number, family, and the story of my life.As the popularity of social networking sites has increased, that is becoming a serious problem. >>> Correct!Moreover, some pictures or videos is being shared rapidly through these sites without permission. >>> Morever, some pictures or videos are being shared repidly through these sites without permission.It is an obvious violation of somebody\'s portrait rights. >>> Correct!So, we have to think carefully about these situations. >>> Correct!

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