Today's homework!!

2015-01-19 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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I think voting should be compulsory. In Korea, people don't have the responsibility of vote. So, voter turnout is always low. People think election day is just a holiday. Although people have a choice to do or not to do, the results of voting cab be changed depending on their choices. Moreover, people can change their nations with a little effort. So, they need to have interests in vote. Also, To increase turnout, a nation need to make a law which enforces people to vote.

강사 첨삭

A wonderful Monday my dearest! It\'s good to see your opinion about the topic. I agree that voting is a very important action. It could determine the future of a country. Thus, it is necessary that people comply to this.   Thanks for sending this in.^^   ~Teacher Shanee     I think voting should be compulsory. >>> Correct!In Korea, people don\'t have the responsibility of vote. >>> In Korea, people don\'t have the responsibility to vote. >>> OR: In Korea, people are not forced to vote.So, voter turnout is always low. >>> Correct! People think election day is just a holiday. >>> Correct!Although people have a choice to do or not to do, the results of voting cab be changed depending on their choices. >>> It is because people can choose whether to vote or not, the result of the election depends on the people\'s decision.Moreover, people can change their nations with a little effort. >>> Correct!  So, they need to have interests in vote. >>> So they need to be interested in voting.Also, To increase turnout, a nation need to make a law which enforces people to vote. >>> Also, to increase the turnout, a nation needs to make a law which enforces people to vote.

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