Tokyo trip #2

Dear [이름]!!!

That\'s a great recommendation!! The places you\'ve visited are truly amazing!!Hope to hear more about your trip in Japan..

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HERE ARE MY CORRECTIONS:

the 2nd date of trip, We went to Daikanyama first.

>>> On the second day of our date trip, we went to Daikanyama.

 Daikanyama is newly emerging spot for missy who likes shopping and getting around.

>>> Daikanyama is an emerging spot for missies who likes shopping and getting around.

 There are many gorgeous stores that make us free to drop by for a while.

>>> Correct.

T-site is a complex composed of exclusive bookstore, coffee shop, restaurant in Daikanyama.

>>> Correct.

Its building was built by Ando tadao, an eminent architecturer, is so wonderful. The bookstore called \"Tsukaya\" is so amazing.

>>> The building was built by Ando Tadao, an eminent architecture, it looks wonderful. The bookstore called \"Tsukaya\" is also amazing.

All books in here are well-displayed and let people grab them.

>>> All books are well-displayed and people can just grab them.

we can\'t only read newly-issued books, but also we eat lunch, watch a movie and listen to music using CD player with fantastic atmosphere.

>>> We can\'t only read newly-issued books, but also we can eat lunch, watch a movie and listen to music using a CD player in a fantastic atmosphere.

It\'s totally organized. I recommend you to visit \"Tsukaya\" if you like indoor activities.

>>> Correct.

and The restaurant \"Ivy place\" we visited serves ordinary italian dishes. but taste is so special.

>>> and the restaurant we visited  called \"Ivy place\" serves ordinary Italian dishes,  but the taste of the food is so special.

They make their own creative taste to use rice as a salad ingredient or put coriander upon usual pizza.

>>> Correct.

I won\'t forget the moments I spent in Daikanyama for a long time.

>>> Correct.