Topic 1

Hello [이름]! I read your self-introduction for our first topic. You did pretty well! Check on some corrections I made on your work. Have a good day!~~T.Dee

Hi I\'m [이름].

>>CORRECT!

>>OR: Hi! My name is [이름].

I\'m an engineer with a degree of Bachelor in Science major in Environmetal Engineering and I worked as a researcher in a Soil analysis laboratory for 5months.

>>I\'m an engineer with a degree of Bachelor in Science major in Environmental Engineering and I worked as a researcher in a soil analysis laboratory for 5 months.

>OR: I\'m an environmental engineer. I have a degree of Bachelor in Science major in Environmental Engineering. In the past, I have worked with a soil analysis laboratory as a researcher for 5 months. (You can split your statement in several sentences so that your ideas can be delivered more clearly).

That\'s why i can handle a equipment for the analysis. 

>>That\'s why I can handle an equipment some analyses in the laboratory. (You can simply say \"lab\" when you are speaking.)

>>OR: My experience gave me skills to use tools in the lab to make an analysis.
I studied aborad in Vancouver for 4months and then i worked as a server in Vancouver Restaurant for 6months.

>>I studied aboard, in Vancouver, for 4 months and then I worked as a server in a restaurant for 6months.

Those experiences let me know about importance of speaking English.

>>Those experiences had let me realize the importance of speaking in English.

That\'s why i have studied steadly speaking English until now. 

>>Because of this,  I have studied steadily to how speak English effectively and I am continuing to learn until now.
I\'m friendly and i like to make a lot of frineds all the time whenever i have the chance eventhough they\'re foreigner.

>>I\'m friendly and I like to make a lot of frineds all the time whenever I have the chance even though they\'re foreigners.
I like watching YouTube videos whenever i can.

>>I like watching YouTube videos and I do it whenever I can.

In the YouTube channels, there are a lot of videos about many kinds of topics like living another contry, traveling, speaking English etc.

>>In some YouTube channels, there are a lot of videos about many kinds of topics like living in another contry, traveling, speaking English etc.

So i can various experiences indirectly.

>>By watching these types of videos, I can learn various experiences indirectly.