Topic 6
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Back then, it was very difficult for me to understand of semiconductor because I majored business and administration.
>>Back then, it was very difficult for me to understand the semiconductor because I majored business and administration.
Badly, when I joined Samsung, my main responsibility was about technology, so there was nothing to do for me.
>>When I joined Samsung, my main responsibility was about technology, so there was nothing to do for me.
However, I started to visit to anyone who can teach me. As time passed by, I could catch up and I’ve gotten the knowledge basically for this job.
>> However, I started to visit to anyone who can teach me. As time passed by, I could catch up and I’ve gotten the knowledge for this job.
Also, I have the ability to deal with anyone gently and humbly.
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>>Also, I am gentle and very humble to anyone.
That’s why I can work with all types of people and I have high level reputation on relationship in my current company.
>> That’s why I can work with all types of people and I have a high reputation with having good relationships in my current company.
Thus, I am not afraid of working in new circumstance.
>>Thus, I am not afraid of working in a new environment
I am hoping to contribute to improve Next corporation’s profit through my strengths.
>>I am hoping to contribute and improve Next corporation’s profit through my strengths.
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