Topic : Do you agree or disagree with following statement?
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With the help of technology, students nowadays can learn more information and learn it more quickly.
I don\'t agree with this statement.
>> Correct
Technology is useful in our life and makes our world convenient.
>> Correct
There\'s no two ways about it.
>> YOU MEAN TO SAY: It\'s not just two ways.
So, it also helps students to study, but only when they use it in right way.
>> It also helps students for their easy studying only if they use it in a right way.
However, the problem is that the technology provides not only useful functions, but also useless functions.
>>Correct
For example, most of university students are using smart phone that is representative product of technology of today.
>> For example, most of the university students are using smart phone which is a product of technology of today.
Through this device, we can surf the internet, send the E-mail and use worthful applications in any place.
>> Through this device, we can surf the Internet, send the E-mail and use worthful applications in any place.
I\'m sure that smart phone saves much time, but it also let us waste our time.
>> I\'m sure that smart phone saves much time, but it also us waste our time.
there are lots of attractive functions that we don\'t need to use.
>> YOU MEAN TO SAY: There are lots of attractive functions that could kill our time.
We spend time to use that functions more than the saved time from the convenience.
>> We spend time to use those functions more than doing things we are supposed to do.
Since the smart phone was disseminated, it is much harder than before that we concentrate on the book.
>> Since smart phone is all around, it could distract our concentration on our book.
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