Topic is a summer vacation plan and experience.
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It approaches the upcoming summer vacation seasons.
And I'm talking about this vacation plan and would like to experience.
I've done traveling to japan in the summer of 2010
I looked around the Tokyo and suburbs in Hakone.
During the day, I go to the odaiba located in the heart of the city.
I see Fuji TV and rainbow bridge. Also I enjoyed the night to see the night in the tokyo metropolitan government.This summer,I will go to the Gang-neung. There is wide and deep sea, and near the mountain named by Sorak mountain.
I expect that this vacation will go with a boyfriend and my family.
I think that travel is relaxing and recharging.
Last Japan' trip is the unique experience of Japanese culture and enjoy new things. Also this domestic thing refreshs myself through the travel.
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Hello there^^
Happy Monday! Thank you so much for sending this composition.
You have done well. I hope you sill enjoy your summer vacation. Take care :)
It approaches the upcoming summer vacation seasons.
>>The upcoming summer vacation is approaching.
And I'm talking about this vacation plan and would like to experience.
>>I will talk about my vacation plan and things I would like to experience.
I've done traveling to japan in the summer of 2010
>>I've traveled to Japan in summer for 2010
I looked around the Tokyo and suburbs in Hakone.
>>I looked around Tokyo ans the suburbs of Hakone.
During the day, I go to the odaiba located in the heart of the city.
>>During the day, I went to Odaiba located in the heart of the city.
I see Fuji TV and rainbow bridge.
>>I saw a Fuji TV and rainbow bridge.
Also I enjoyed the night to see the night in the tokyo metropolitan government.
>>I also enjoyed seeing the night in Tokyo Metropolitan government.
This summer,I willgo to the Gang-neung.
>>This summer I will go to Gang-neung.
There is wide and deep sea, and near the mountain named by Sorak mountain.
>>There is a wide and deep sea near Sorak mountain.
I expect that this vacation will go with a boyfriend and my family.
>>I expect to go with my boyfriend and family this vacation.
I think that travel is relaxing and recharging.
>>I think traveling is relaxing and recharging.
Last Japan' trip is the unique experience of Japanese culture and enjoy new things.
>>My last trip to Japan was a unique Japanese experience and Enjoyed new things.
Also this domestic thing refreshs myself through the travel.
>>Also, I refresh myself through traveling.
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