Topic: life (preparing for the conversation final exam in my school) -1

2012-06-07 · 첨삭 강사 Aurora

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When I think about life, the first thing which hit upon my mind is what I want to do in the future and what is the best way to make my life successfully. I think that two things are riciprocal. If I don't get a job which I want to, I would not make my life successfully. So it means If one thing is missed, I can do another thing neither. So I'll tell you the first one. When I look back to my adolecent period, I liked reading books and did well in studying. But I couldn't find the subject which I really liked. As I entered the university, I found my interests on and ability for an economices. So, though I chose math for my major, I'll change that to economics. The reason why I found economics interesting is it gave me pleasure when I studied, and the world main issues almost belongs to the economics. I really want to do things which can contribute to the Korea and to the world. And I thought economics is an appropriate thing which fullfills my wanting. (To be continued...)

강사 첨삭

Hello there! Thank you for your composition and for sharing your interest which is Economics. It\'s good to know that you really care about your country and that you want to contribute something good to Korea. Continue being a role model. Have a  great day! When I think about life, the first thing which hit upon my mind is what I want to do in the future and what is the best way to make my life successfully. >> When I think about life, the first thing I think about is what I want to do in the future and what is the best way to make my life successful. I think that two things are riciprocal. >> For me, those two things are reciprocal. If I don\'t get a job which I want to, I would not make my life successfully. >> If I don\'t get the job that I want, I can\'t become successful. So it means If one thing is missed, I can do another thing neither. >> It means, if I missed one thing, I can\'t do other things either.So I\'ll tell you the first one. >> Correct. When I look back to my adolecent period, I liked reading books and did well in studying. >> When I was an adolescent, I  studied well and I liked reading books.  But I couldn\'t find the subject which I really liked. >> But I couldn\'t figure out the subject which I really liked. As I entered the university, I found my interests on and ability for an economices. >> As I entered the university, I discovered my interest in Economics. So, though I chose math for my major, I\'ll change that to economics. >> Although my major was Math, I shifted to Economics. The reason why I found economics interesting is it gave me pleasure when I studied, and the world main issues almost belongs to the economics. >> The reason why I chose Economics was because it gave me pleasure with my studies and most of world issues are connected to Economics.  I really want to do things which can contribute to the Korea and to the world. >> I really want to do things which can contribute to Korea and to the world as well. And I thought economics is an appropriate thing which fullfills my wanting. >> I thought that Economics is the appropriate major to fulfill my goal in life.(To be continued...) >> (To be continued...)

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