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Tour is important for both personal life and county.
>>Tours are important for both personal life and a country.
Tour itself could be encourage to give good energy and refreshment to tired people.
>>Going on a tour can provide a much-needed boost of positive energy and refreshment for tired individuals.
Tourism is also an essential factor in reviving the economy of country and each province.
> Tourism is also an essential factor in reviving a country\'s economy and each province within it.
So every province are developing attractive tour area competitively.
>>So every province is developing attractive tourist destinations competitively.
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