Tourism is the most effective weapon to save the world. Nandish Singh. What do you think Singh means

2020-10-20 · 첨삭 강사 Fiona

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There might be a background why he said that, unless this is a bit hard to understand to me. When I imagine this, tourism could be the easiest way to feel and learn about other’s culture, and then, it could make us understand each other.  Nowadays, there are many conflicts between ethnics, religions, or countries. Every society has reasons why it is distinguishable based on history, regional climate, and geopolitical differences. However, the others’ characteristics are not easily accepted until you go there and feel them with your skin. You cannot know everything about them through one travelling, but you can start to get a favourable mind. Moreover, as you are trying to be generous to someone, you can also get a similar mindset to others. Therefore, tourism could become a key to solve a lot of current social problems. Nonetheless, I’m a little skeptical. Because many types of tourism are focused on just entertainment whatever there is regardless.

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There might be a background why he said that, unless this is a bit hard to understand to me. 
>>>There might be a background why he said that, unless this is a bit hard to understand for me. 
When I imagine this, tourism could be the easiest way to feel and learn about other’s culture, and then, it could make us understand each other.
>>>CORRECT!
OR: When you imagine this, tourism can be the easiest way to feel and learn about other people\'s cultures, and then you can understand each other.
Nowadays, there are many conflicts between ethnics, religions, or countries. 
>>>CORRECT!
OR: Today, there are many conflicts between races, religions, and countries.
Every society has reasons why it is distinguishable based on history, regional climate, and geopolitical differences. 
>>>CORRECT!
OR: Every society has reasons to distinguish between history, regional climate, and geopolitical differences.
However, the others’ characteristics are not easily accepted until you go there and feel them with your skin. 
>>>CORRECT!
You cannot know everything about them through one travelling, but you can start to get a favourable mind.
>>>CORRECT!
OR: You can\'t know everything about them through one trip. 
Moreover, as you are trying to be generous to someone, you can also get a similar mindset to others. 
>>>CORRECT!
Therefore, tourism could become a key to solve a lot of current social problems. 
>>>CORRECT!
OR: Therefore, tourism can be the key to solving many social problems.
Nonetheless, I’m a little skeptical. 
>>>CORRECT!
Because many types of tourism are focused on just entertainment whatever there is regardless.
>>>CORRECT!

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