Tourism today creates a variety of problems, such as pollution due to flights, traffic congestion, a
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As you know, tourism industry causes many environmental pollutions. However, it is more problem not only tourism industry but also all of the industry such as manufacturing factories. they create air pollution like fine dust when making products in the plants.
I think that the government should be charged extra tax to the company what making environmental pollution. I think the environmental pollution caused by the tourism industry is much less than caused by other industries.
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Good evening Andy! Great ideas! ^_^
T. Irene
As you know, tourism industry causes many environmental pollutions.
>>> As you may know, the tourism industry causes many environmental pollutions.
However, it is more problem not only tourism industry but also all of the industry such as manufacturing factories.
>>> However, it is a problem, not only related to the tourism industry but also all industries such as manufacturing factories.
they create air pollution like fine dust when making products in the plants.
>>> The plants produce fine dusts from the machines they are using and the things they are producing.
I think that the government should be charged extra tax to the company what making environmental pollution.
I think that the government should be charged extra tax to the company what making environmental pollution.
>>> I think that the government should charge extra tax to the companies that are creating environmental pollutions.
I think the environmental pollution caused by the tourism industry is much less than caused by other industries.
>>> I think the environmental pollution caused by the tourism industry is much lesser than those caused by other industries.
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