Tourist attraction
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This is exciting, [이름]!
I bet Korea is a picturesque country, so many people are dreaming about going there. Your country is very rich in culture and it has been a big influencer in fashion nowadays. I personally would like to visit Korea someday, so wait for me there. Thanks for sharing this piece with me. See you!^^
~Teacher Eunice
As each individual have a different characteristics and tastes, popular tourist attraction may appears differently to the case.
>>> As each individual has a different characteristic and taste, popular tourist attractions may appear differently in that case.
I want to present popular tourist attraction for students.
>>> I want to present some popular tourist attractions to students.
In the case of students, they prefer the trip to Seoul or Jeonju.
>>> In the case of students, they prefer going on a trip to Seoul or Jeonju.
It is a kind of fashion to go to those cities with friends in a vacation.
>>> It is a kind of fashion to go to those cities with friends for a vacation.
Seoul is the center of culture in korea, so there are a lot of attractions in there.
>>> Seoul is the center of the culture in Korea, so there are a lot of attractions in there.
But, many student tourist love to shop at Gangnam shopping multiplex and go to a picnic on the Hangang river.
>>> But, many tourists love to shop at Gangnam shopping multiplex and go on a picnic at Hangang river.
Jeonju is famous for their Hanok village and the Catholic Church which is constructed first in Korea.
>>> Jeonju is famous for their Hanok village and the Catholic Church which is first constructed in Korea.
These are good places to take selfies.
>>> Correct!
Many groups of friends and couples book the train to Jeonju and borrow Hanbok to wear during the trip.
>>> Correct!
Jeonju is also famous for its iconic street food, so many low-budgeted trips of students are often towards Jeonju.
>>> Jeonju is also famous for its iconic street foods, so there are many low-budgeted students\' trips in Jeonju.
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