Toy

2022-07-21 · 첨삭 강사 Irene

학생이 쓴 원문

I used to playing with a lego and Barbie doll. I think I used to do role-playing with these. And, also I feel interesting to make what I wanted to build with the legos. But, It was not enough to fill my satisfation. I always want t get the new toys but it was too expensive, so my parents didn\'t buy that much for me. I think the recent toys are so many kinds of toys every each ages like from 0 yeas old to elementary student in Korea. I think they have so many advantages in the toys thesedays. they can help the baby\'s sense, thinking skills, creativity and so on. If I were a mom, then I will buy these for my baby!

강사 첨삭

Good evening [이름] Woon. Thanks for your thoughts regarding this issue. ^_^

T. Irene

I used to playing with a lego and Barbie doll.

>>> I used to play with Lego and a Barbie doll.

I think I used to do role-playing with these.

>>> I remember that I did role-playing games with these.

And, also I feel interesting to make what I wanted to build with the legos.

>> It was also interesting to build different things with Lego.

But, It was not enough to fill my satisfation.

>>> But, it was not enough to satisfy me.

I always want t get the new toys but it was too expensive, so my parents didn\'t buy that much for me.

>>> I have always wanted to get new toys but they were too expensive so my parents didn\'t buy that much for me.
I think the recent toys are so many kinds of toys every each ages like from 0 yeas old to elementary student in Korea.

>>> I think there are different toys these days for different age groups.

I think they have so many advantages in the toys thesedays.

>>> There are so many advantages to having these present toys.

they can help the baby\'s sense, thinking skills, creativity and so on.

>>> They can help build the baby\'s senses, thinking skills, creativity, and so on.

If I were a mom then I will buy these for my baby!

>>> Correct.

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