Traditaional manner

2014-06-08 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

학생이 쓴 원문

We have followed our traditional manner which is absorbed in our life. You can notice it, when you see a(Korean) calendar. Our ancestors used a luna calendar so, It is changed by a luna calendar. Customs are these kind of thing we do every year. For example, 5/5 is "Dan-O" which is famous for cleaning your hair with special water. it is believed as protect people from bad things. But, In these days, Customs are not important anymore. so It is gradually erased from people. I think we should try to preseve our Customs

강사 첨삭

[이름]!
Thanks for sharing this!
I really like learning new things about Korea.
I admire you for sharing this.
Do you use Dan-O? Please share it in class.
Talk to you soon! Have a great day!
Teacher Nina

We have followed our traditional manner which is absorbed in our life.
>> Correct
>> OR: We followed our traditional manners which is already practiced in our everyday life.
You can notice it, when you see a(Korean) calendar.
>> Correct
Our ancestors used a luna calendar so, It is changed by a luna calendar.
>> Our ancestors used lunar calendar so, the traditions are changed by it. ( spelling check: lunar ^^)
>> OR: Our ancestors used lunar calendar so our customs and traditions are affected by it.
Customs are these kind of thing we do every year.
>> Customs are the things that we do every year.
For example, 5/5 is \"Dan-O\" which is famous for cleaning your hair with special water.
>> Correct
>> OR: For example. 5/5 is called \" Dan-O\" is a special water used for cleaning our hair.
it is believed as protect people from bad things.
>> It is believed to protect people from bad things.

But, In these days, Customs are not important anymore.
>> But these days, customs are not important anymore.
so It is gradually erased from people.
>> So people forget it gradually.
>> OR: So it is being forgotten by people gradually.
I think we should try to preseve our Customs
>> I think we should try to remember it to preserve our custom. ( spelling check: preserve ^^)

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