Traditions in Korea
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There are some traditions in Korea that young people are moving away from such cooking at home to prepare thanksgiving meals. Thanksgiving in Korea is one of important holiday for the family gathering. Koreans prepare many different foods to celebrate thanksgiving in family. They strat the preparation from the day before and spend over than 10 years. The probleme is that only womens prepare the thanksgiving food and mens staying watching television or playing games. This unequal situation broke some couples and is one for reason for divorce. Korean womens do not want any more spend so many time only for the preparing some food. Now, more and more families eat in restaurants instead than prepare food at home.
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Good morning Ms. [이름]!
It\'s really tiring to cook, wash dishes and entertain visitors at the same time, so I understand why many women doesn\'t wanna do the old tradition anymore.
Also, I think men should also do their part in helping their partner to have a successful gathering.
Anyhow, thank you!
There are some traditions in Korea that young people are moving away from such cooking at home to prepare thanksgiving meals.
>>CORRECT!
Thanksgiving in Korea is one of important holiday for the family gathering.
>>Thanksgiving Day in Korea is one of the most important holidays for family gatherings.
Koreans prepare many different foods to celebrate thanksgiving in family.
>>Koreans prepare many different foods to celebrate Thanksgiving in their family.
They strat the preparation from the day before and spend over than 10 years.
>>They start the prepartion the day before Thanksgiving.
The probleme is that only womens prepare the thanksgiving food and mens staying watching television or playing games.
>>The problem is that only women prepare Thanksgiving food and men watch television or play games.
This unequal situation broke some couples and is one for reason for divorce.
>>This unequal situation has broken some couples and is one of the reasons for divorce.
Korean womens do not want any more spend so many time only for the preparing some food.
>>Korean women no longer want to spend so much time just preparing food.
Now, more and more families eat in restaurants instead than prepare food at home.
>>Now, more and more families eat at restaurants instead of preparing food at home.
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