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I went to my elder sister's house. It made me a little tired. Because I had a heavy carrier and long journey time. At first, I got on the express train 'KTX'. I got off at Dajeon station. It took about 2 hours. After getting off, I transfered to other train at the same track in 10 minutes. Then I got off at Suwon station again. I had to get on subway and 1 more bus to get my sister's house. The international exchange expert workshop will be held at Paju, Gyeonggi province where are so far from my hometown. It takes more than 6 hours to get there. The members including me will enter English Town at Paju for 3 days. There will be a various educational program at the workshop.

Hello Nickey! I have read  and checked your essay, and I must say that I am impressed. That's because you were very careful about not committing grammatical mistakes. Keep it up! I went to my elder sister's house. >> Correct It made me a little tired. Because I had a heavy carrier and long journey time. >> It made me a little tired because I had a heavy carrier and a long journey time.   At first, I got on the express train 'KTX'. >> Correct.  I got off at Dajeon station. >> Correct.  It took about 2 hours. >> Correct.  After getting off, I transfered to other train at the same track in 10 minutes. >> After getting off, I transferred to another train at the same track in 10 minutes.   Then I got off at Suwon station again. >> Then I got off at Suwon station. I had to get on subway and 1 more bus to get my sister's house. >> I had to get on the subway and one more bus to get to my sister's house.   The international exchange expert workshop will be held at Paju, Gyeonggi province where are so far from my hometown. >> The International Exchange Expert Workshop will be held at Paju, Gyeonggi province where it is so far from my hometown.  It takes more than 6 hours to get there. >> Correct./ six hours  The members including me will enter English Town at Paju for 3 days. >>Correct. / three days   There will be a various educational program at the workshop. >> Correct.