transform my business

2020-07-28 · 첨삭 강사 Jasper

학생이 쓴 원문

It`s a very difficult question I don`t think I can change it in a short time. There is a lot of competition and a lot of information I want to read the needs of the customers with sincerity and effort. If I continue to investigate the inconvenience or requirements that I felt as a consumer, I will be able to do better business. . .

강사 첨삭

Hi Mrs. [Name]! Your composition is highly appreciated. You are helping me and yourself altogether. Great job! See you in class.

Here are your corrections:

It`s a very difficult question

>> CORRECT

I don`t think I can change it in a short time.

>> CORRECT

There is a lot of competition and a lot of information

>> CORRECT

I want to read the needs of the customers with sincerity and effort.

>> CORRECT

If I continue to investigate the inconvenience or requirements that I felt as a consumer,
I will be able to do better business.

>> If I can investigate the inconvenience that my customers felt continuously, I will be able to do a better business.

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